Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login


Just  unnoticed / Intro 



Finally! the bell rang for lunch, I  lowered the ladder quietly  when someone screamed “FIGHT”

And everybody ran to the cafeteria to see this.

“Seriously, again… another fight courtesy of BTT, Yeih!…” I thought, tired of this kind of situation.

You: “Hey Feliks, what happened now?”

Feliks: “Mmm? Hey __________  you were there” he giggled. “ Well it sounds like,  yesterday  someone stepped on, accidentally, Gilbertīs  shoe”

***: R- Really? That is all? *Said a guy I never see before*
Feliks: “Oh sorry _________  I didnīt introduced you to Toris, Toris she is, like totally, my best friend ______ “

Toris: Nice to meet you *he smiled*

You:  Hi Toris

Feliks: He is new in the school and he looks like totally funny.

Toris: Haha thanks.. he smirked nervously.

You: So this is only for that stupid reason? You see Toris the “BTT” are students of last year, they rule the school. If someone make them angry, they "mark" on you and the whole world know must to bullying you. They are Francis Bonnefoy, is a big pervert, he likes flirting with everybody, and I say everybody, with  girls… and boys too,  Antonio Fernandez Carriedo, he is the most quiet, but donīt trust in that… also he like play with girls… and Gilbert Belschmith.. he is the lider of Bad Friend Trio, he thinks is really “awesome” in every sence, is really cruel, and he enjoy  to annoy people.. his favorite target are Rodercich Edelstein.., poor guy… Feliks and I try to be unnoticed, without standing, is the best way to do this.

Suddenly they enter to the cafeteria  and from the crowd pushed the guy at floor  in front of them.

Gilbert motioned for everyone to be quiet…

Gilbert: I īll give a last chance, if you clean my shoe (putting the his foot in front of this guy) with your tongue,  you can go. So you see I have mercy. *He smirked*

***: Screw you Gilbert Belshmith!

Gilbert laughed, and everybody started to laugh too.

Gilbert: Kesesesese You idiot!

Gilbert kicked him in the face and punched him in the stomach, on keep on.

Feliks, Toris and I just get out of there. I saw Toris shocked of it. Are you ok? I asked him. Ye-yeah, just a little bit nervous , but mmm can I hang out with you guys?. We nodded.

Since that day we try to be invisible to the BTT, to donīt have any problem with them.

*Skip Time*

It was a normal day. In my favorite class, art class! This was freer for everybody, you can walk around if you want to restless. We was in oil painting  and I was working in a portrait of my fave artist.

When Feliks come to talk with me and with his  brush made a lines in my canvas

You: Feliks Lukasiewicz donīt put whiskers on (your fave artist) face!

Feliks: OMG your face is like totally funny right now! *He laughed*

You: *angry sight*

Fel: Ok, ok sorry. ___________, can you come with me to buy some fabric today, I have a  dress design in my head and I would like totally love to sew it, kay?

You.  Of course Feliks

Feliks: and later can you come at my home to help with the dress measurements. Ha and Toris is coming too.

You: Sure!

He smiled at me and turned back quickly when…

Gilbert:  WHAT ARE YOU F*CKING DOING?!!

The class was in absolutely silence, Feliks had smeared his paint palette on Gilbert's shirt…

Gilbert: ARE YOU BLIND? BASTARD!

Feliks: Haaa…. I… I am so-sorry. *He looked down*

Gilbert: YOU SORRY?!!! Son of b-

Toris: He said he's sorry,

Gilbert: HAAA?!
Toris: He apologized… to you, it was an accident

Gilbert: HOW ARE YOU IN FIRST PLACE??!

Francis: He looks like someone new. Hononon. *He put an arm on the back of Toris* You are cute… really really cute

Gilbert:  FRANCIS!!!

Francis: Sorry Gilbo...

Gilbert: Donīt call me that! SCHEISSE! Look at all the paint in me shirt. * He removed his shirt * This shirt costs more than all your clothes together!

Feliks just was in silence, his hand shaking a little bit, and probably he gonna cry by nervous.

You: Hey Gilbert! * I said I'm upset, but quickly I repented…*

Gilbert saw me and raise an eyebrow. “Who are you? Must to be new in the school too”

You: No, I-

Gilbert: I donīt care!, today  everyone thinks that can raise your voice at me, and stain the awesome me with paint!

You: *I started to talk really softly* Gilbert, please, we donīt want to have troubles, just was an accident-

Gilbert: Donīt  be stupid!

You:  And I can wash your shirt! *I yelled… ok probably I was really nervous too, to think clear* But please, don’t hurt him.

Gilbert looked at me really surprised,  and motioned Francis and Antonio to go.

Thatīs was all? Really?.  Ok, is the first time a girl confronts him. And just left…
More late, shopping with Feliks, we was shocking about. We knew the consequences to talk Gilbert Belshmith in that way.

Toris: I donīt understand. Why he didnīt punch us?

Feliks: I donīt know, probably he didnīt hit _____________ because is  a girl,  but us?

Toris: I think if he if  had tried to punch me, I would have fought him!

Feliks: Of course I could do the same! But when someone defense of him, Francis and Antonio  fight too. Is three vs one. That isnīt like totally unfair!

Toris: But we are at least two.

Feliks: But you don’t know how they fight. They donīt play fair
You: Hey Iīm here too,  I could fight with one too… I think so. Any way nothing happened guys! We won: 1 – BTT :0

At least that I thought at beginning...
Add a Comment:
 
:iconcahier-orange:
Cahier-Orange Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
This is good~
Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2015  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! ^^
Reply
:iconnjhetalia:
NjHetalia Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014
Uhm you have a lot of grammar mistakes. I just thought I'd let you know. Otherwise it is a good intro ^^
Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student Digital Artist
I know, Iīm so sorry, Sweating a little... Iīm trying to get it better and thanks!
Reply
:iconnjhetalia:
NjHetalia Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014
The best thing to do is have an editor. Mine is my guy friend Adrian. And when he's not online, my editor is Open Office XD
Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Open Office I guess is a translator program? :)
Well as you, sometimes I can find an editor, but thereīs noy always available to help :/

Btw thanks  for the "watch" dear is really appreciated :iconorlyspainplz:
Reply
:iconnjhetalia:
NjHetalia Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
np ^w^
Reply
:iconilovecats13:
ilovecats13 Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
OOOOOO MORE?
Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Sure! here is the next part fav.me/d6roajc :)
Reply
:iconilovecats13:
ilovecats13 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
^^ AWESOME
Reply
:iconscarletc:
ScarletC Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Student General Artist
BOYS OVER FLOWERS HETALIA STYLE!!! YES XD
Reply
:iconhetalianloverxd:
HetalianLoverXD Featured By Owner May 24, 2014  Student Writer
That's what I was thinking! XD
Reply
:icondigiotaku123:
DigiOtaku123 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This looks like it'll be interesting. I like how I'm friends with Poland.:D (Big Grin) 
Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! Yep I think Poland would be a good friend :iconlukasiewiczplz:
Reply
:icondigiotaku123:
DigiOtaku123 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
He won't only be a goof friend, he'll also be FABULOUS. :iconpolandsparklesplz:
Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Yeah, Indeed :iconcaptainfeliksplz:
Even I thought  he could be readerīs  fashion designer :D
Reply
:icondigiotaku123:
DigiOtaku123 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
OMG THAT'S EXACTLY WHAT I WAS THINKING!!!!!!
Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Yeah right? :D
I think Iīll write something related with this in the next chapters :iconpolandskirtplz:
Reply
:icondigiotaku123:
DigiOtaku123 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Can't wait to see it! ~~~~
Reply
:iconsijna:
Sijna Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013
Haha love it! 
Can't waot for more! ~
Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Really? Thank u!
Next part will post on wednesday ^^
Reply
:iconsijna:
Sijna Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013
Ooh okay do you always submit it on wednesday? 
Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Well not always... actually I will say sorry, because is thursday and
I just upload the part 2 if u want to read :D
fav.me/d6roajc
Reply
:iconsijna:
Sijna Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013
Don't worry I still love it! ~ {maybe I love ya also Xd} 
Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Really? great ^^ (Lol thanks XD)
Reply
:iconprinsessetristan:
PrinsesseTristan Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Student General Artist
You have a pretty decent plot going on here, especially for only your second Country x Reader, but the way you write could use some work. Remember, it's a story so dialogue is usually in a paragraph, this is not a play, that's the way you're writing it out. And your grammar needs slight fixing. I'd be happy to help you and everything if you ever needed it and I'm not trying to be rude here. :)

Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Student Digital Artist
No prob, I totally understand, if you you want you can correct it
 and leave the correct version in a note and I can modifiy this,
and of course I will give u credit for the final work edition ^^
Reply
:iconprinsessetristan:
PrinsesseTristan Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2013  Student General Artist
I can do that and thank you for understand me wanting to help you. Some people take offence to it.
Reply
:iconzamarazula:
Zamarazula Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Ok thank u very much! :D , send me when you get it ready then ^^ just the gramatical part and expressions. Yeah I know that some people take in that way,  but since I have  a lot to learn about writing in english, when even Iīm not a writer,  I knew that I would have critiques, so is fine for me :iconhappychinaplz:
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconzamarazula: More from Zamarazula


Featured in Collections

Hetalia Bad Touch Trio by AliceFunLand

Hetalia by DoublerTrouble

Hetalia by smarty-pants18


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
October 7, 2013
File Size
6.5 KB
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
2,224 (1 today)
Favourites
79 (who?)
Comments
29
×